Monday, March 30, 2009

I stay awake


This song is co-written/edited with my good friend Rick John (One Big Love)

(Guitar INTRO)

You stood there for me
Just you, alone for me
I know, I don’t stand a chance
To say anything else but

I’m sorry for all I did
And the things from you I hid
Still, I beg you to
Leave me and move on

Smile, just keep smiling
Not for me

(Music stops)

Just for you

(Music begins)

I stay awake to see
Your innocent eyes closed
To see your pretty face
In your sleep
I love you even more (DUAL VOCALS)

No words can ever tell
My feelings for you
No words can make you stay
And forgive the things I said to you

I’m sorry for all I did
And the things from you I hid
Still, I beg you to
Leave me and move on

(Guitar bridge)

Smile and keep smiling
No, not for me
Only for you

You rained joy
Spreading into my life
But, I...

(Guitar solo)

Now, that you’re gone
Where do I turn
To fill the empty space
I still keep looking
For that lucky face
Girl, you just keep moving on
Until you find that one
Who’ll love you more

(Drums stop)

More, than I ever could (DUAL VOCALS)

(Piano + Guitar solo)
(Piano stops)
(Guitar strokes + Strings)

Thank you, Girl, for standing by me
For the faith you held in me
You know, your words, they can make
And, you know they can break me too
I’m down on my knees
And, beg you, oh please

(Drums begin)

I’m sorry for all I did
And the things from you I hid
Still, I beg you to
Leave me and move on
Move on (HIGH PITCH)

Smile, you just keep smiling (DUAL VOCALS)
Never for me
Only for you

Yea, Only for you

Stay sweet Katie (spoken EXTRO)


Copyright © Ajey Padival, ed. Rick John 2009 (Australia/United Kingdom; ajeypadival@msn.com and rikkij77@yahoo.co.uk)

Image by Eric

40 responses:

Shadow said...

....speechless!!! you 2 make an excellent team. this i'm VERY eager to hear in it's totality, music, lyrics, it all!!! absolutely outstanding guys!

Saadi said...

Really good stuff!

This is very different from the other stuff I've read here! But even then it's really good!

Thumbs up on another successful collaboration, Brosreview! :D

Opaque said...

@Shadow - "you 2 make an excellent team"

Don't we? I thought so too. Thanks to Rick who was supportive and anxious as well. I am quite happy with this one.

Thank you!!!

Opaque said...

@Saadi - "Thumbs up on another successful collaboration"

Cheers mate!!!

Rikkij said...

AJ-you give me too much credit. it was a great song before I ever knew of it. You just let me mess it up a bit to be nice. Thanks, Bro

Opaque said...

@Rikkij - No, mate. You've been a great help. Don't ever derogate it with a word "mess". I will get back to you in a few weeks time for another song. I have got a plan in me head. Ta.

Make Me Disappear said...

No different, yet one of its kind..

This is beautifully sad and touching.. Real good song..

Cheers to both of you..I loved it

-Rahul

Opaque said...

@Make Me Disappear -

"No different, yet one of its kind.."

Yes, that was what we were aiming for.

Saadi said...

Let me correct my last comment successful AND amazing!

I just read it again! It's THAT good!

Opaque said...

@Saadi - "I just read it again!"

Thank you!!! I am glad you like this one.

sudharm baxi said...

Loved your blog immensely..and already added myself to the followers list.

Good pieces truly, could almost visualize those being performed onstage.

Opaque said...

@sudharm baxi - Oh, thank you!!! It is nice of you to write so. I shall visit your spot shortly.

Anonymous said...

Aw sad, made me cry. But I always think something is well written, when it provokes some sort of emotion; whatever that emotion maybe.So a thumbs up from me, Ajey!

Opaque said...

@SarahA - Thank you!!!

"But I always think something is well written, when it provokes some sort of emotion; whatever that emotion maybe."

So very true!!

xxAJ

sudharm baxi said...

Thank you so much for those reviews at my blog..Read an attempted emotional piece, when you get time, at -
Ohh Son!!

Thanks again for all those words ..

Opaque said...

@sudharm baxi - No worries!!! I was just being honest to you. I enjoyed my stay there. Yea, I shall check it out now.

Woman in a Window said...

It's weird. I've never been here before, don't know you, but i have been reading Rick for a while, and I swear, I could hear that song while I read it. It was just on the edge of understanding for me, better than front and center. What a wonderful collaboration! I have to say though, it pains me that I can't hear it. Will someone play it, please? That would be lovely.

Preetilata【ツ】 said...

wowwwwwwwwwwwwwww it's A.M.A.Z.I.N.G

but i really do want to listen to the song. why dont u upload the audio bros?

kudos to both of u.

Opaque said...

@Woman in a Window - Yea, I hope so too. May be sometime soon I will manage to find someone appropriate to play this one.

I am glad you like this one. Thank you!!!

Opaque said...

@Preeilata - Sure, once the music is done, I shall upload it as well.

Thank you, I am glad you like this one.

Dorothi said...

AMAZING!! AWESOME!! FANTASTIC!!! are even inadequate to convey how it felt but it was something really gr8....never knew pain can be so beautiful and soothing!! Only thing that I regret is that I can't hear it....such a beautiful song.
Keep up your good work!!

Opaque said...

@dreamer - Hey, thanks a lot!!! I am glad you like this one.

Anonymous said...

why don't you put the videos or embedded mp3 files of these beautiful songs ?? this will be my fav of all songs i read on this page !!

Opaque said...

@Pretty Me!! - Thank you!!! But, all these are not yet composed. Else, I would have done what you have suggested to do. Cheers!!!

Noelle Dunn.... A Poet in Progress said...

That is awesome!!! I wish someone would sing that for me!! :) Thanks for all of your wonderful comments on my page!

Opaque said...

@Noelle - "I wish someone would sing that for me!! :)"

Ah, that's a complement!!! Thank you!!!

Josephine said...

Great fruits of collaboration you two!! Like the song a lot! Sometimes we just know that we shouldn't be with the other person even if it hurts to part... sad, but happens...
Nice work!!
-Alex

Opaque said...

@Alexandra Garland - Yea, thanks a lot!!!

Notion said...

aw thats sad but beautiful written

Opaque said...

@Notion - Yea, it is. Thank you!!!

Cynthia said...

Beautiful, true love to wish the
best for someone, even if it means
this person should leave you.

Opaque said...

@Cynthia - You've very beautifully put it Cynthia. That's exactly what I intend to convey. Thank you!!!

Anonymous said...

Awwwww, :-(

Opaque said...

@Meena - You needn't write more. That says it all. Thank you!!!

Viji said...

this is what love is all about...living for the other.

"Girl, you just keep moving on
Until you find that one
Who’ll love you more"

it's very difficult for two people to work on a same poetry.. it needs rapport and thoughts that run alike :) as a team u guys have won thumbs up..

Rick and Ajey: a great song from two good hearts... Cheers!!! keep writing.

Opaque said...

@Viji - "it's very difficult for two people to work on a same poetry.. it needs rapport and thoughts that run alike :) as a team u guys have won thumbs up..

Yes, very true. Thanks a lot for appreciating our work.

Diya said...

Do I need to express what I felt...? It has already been appropriately done Ajey.
Cheers AJ And your team. :)

Opaque said...

@Diya - Thank you!!!

thoughts said...

your poems of lost love are simply heart moving.

best wishes,

Opaque said...

@thoughts - Thank you!!! I am glad you think so.