Wednesday, May 20, 2009

Winter Goodbye


This song is written/co-edited with my good friend Rick John (One Big Love)

Read our first successful effort here - I stay awake

(Guitar Strokes + Bass w/o Drums)

You tell me to go
Your eyes
They say
Far, far away
And, you tell me as
You hide your tears
“Take care and
Be well”

But, I wonder

(Piano begins w/o Drums)

Why should I
Take care of myself
For whom should I
Take care of myself
And, why should you
Bear the shame and
Hide the pain
That leaving knows

(Drums Begin - OVERLAPPING VOCALS)
I worry Love

(DUAL VOCALS)
In August laughter
Can you live without me?
Now and hereafter (OVERLAPPING Drum Fill)
If I go
Away from you now
Will your heart let go
And, can it be free?
Yea
Can it ever be free?

(Guitar Bridge)
(Drums Fill)

I've lived for you
You’ve lived for me
I see your eyes
They look for me
In places
In other faces

And, I know
Without me
You'll die
And, I’ll die
Without you

(Instrumental Bridge)
(Drums Fill)
(HIGH-PITCH)
I'm dying already
Can't you see?

Can't we bear Winter?
That April might find us and
Chase the cold from our soul
Bringing summer’s easy warmth
To wash away goodbye

(HIGH-PITCH)
I'm dying already
Can't you see?

(Drums Fill)
(DUAL VOCALS)
In August laughter
Can you live without me?
Now and hereafter (OVERLAPPING Drum Fill)
If I go
Away from you now
Will your heart let go
Will it be free?
Yea
Will it ever be free?

Without me
you'll die and
So will I
I'm dying already!
Can't you see?

Come save me, my love
You’re my angel, my love

(DUAL VOCALS)
In August laughter
Can you live without me?
Now and hereafter (OVERLAPPING Drum Fill)
If I go
Away from you now
Will your heart let go
Will it be free?
Tell me love
Can it ever be free?

(REPEAT – FADE OUT)

(Alternate title - You tell me)


Copyright © Rick John, ed. Ajey Padival and Rick John 2009 (Australia/United Kingdom; ajeypadival@msn.com and rikkij77@yahoo.co.uk)

Image by Dr4kon

59 responses:

Viji said...

Hey beautiful lines. touching. it's as if i am reading my words. Good work Rick,AJ...

Shadow said...

could it get any better??? i don't think so. perfect!

Bonnie Bonsai said...

The lyrics has a personal touch to me as of late. Very touching and emotional.

With words like these, why do you have to use drums? Notes are Rock? I personally would prefer just piano accompaniment. More for sentimental reason.

(I had been into medical field too, but did not get a chance to practice it here. But it sounds you are happy outside dentistry.) :)

Brosreview said...

@Viji - Thank you!

Brosreview said...

@Shadow - Ah, thanks!!!

Brosreview said...

@Bonnie - Ah, yes I thought of the same instrumentation too. But, since I was desperate to add a soft rock element to it, like the last one, I added drums.

Yea, I am glad with what I am doing right now.

Thanks you!!!

Noelle said...

Simply amazing!! Wonderfully deep and touching.....you guys write awesome stuff together.

Brosreview said...

@Noelle - Thank you!!! I am glad you like this one.

Rikkij said...

AJ-I really like how you arranged the lyrics and music. really like the pic too. Thanks for letting me tinker with your song. ~rick

Brosreview said...

@Rikkij - Ah! you are here! Thanks mate. I am glad you like the add-ins. Couldn't create the magic without you. Thanks again!!!

dreamer said...

Awesome....simply amazing...nothing could be any better...
Loved the way you used season.....And the title is apt.

Brosreview said...

@dreamer - Thank you!!!

J said...

I must write that it is quite rarely I get to read something soft from you. Well, this particular one is a collaboration going uphill.

A decently good one. The last one was good as well. The similar mood-set exists in this song too.

Good luck!

Brosreview said...

@J - Thanks mate. Yea, something soft to neutralize the otherwise intense and dark effect.

Zendagi Migzara said...

Hey,
That was very touching... It struck a chord in me, coz I relate to it... So beautifully worded..

Superbo!!

Preetilata【ツ】 said...

hi ajey,

thanks for this beautiful lyrics. it reminded me of something which has gone into hibernation inside my heart. beautiful, touching, painful.. it is full of every emotions. n i loved it so very much.


ps: since long no visits from u.

take care. :)

Jenny Enochsson said...

Very poignant and beautiful!

The "drum add" is a contrast that complements the delicateness of the words and the piano.

I am a big fan of these sorts of contrasts. :)

/Jenny

SarahA said...

This is bloody brilliant, you!

thepoetryman said...

And, why should you
Bear the shame and
Hide the pain
That leaving knows
Best line for sure...

Brosreview said...

@Zendagi - Thanks!!!

Brosreview said...

@Preetilata - Thank you. I am glad you like this one.

Well, I did not receive any updates from your spot. Well, I am heading there right away.

Brosreview said...

@Jenny - I am glad you identified the reason behind those elements. Thanks!!!

Brosreview said...

@SarahA - Ah, thank you!!!

Brosreview said...

@thepoetryman - Thanks!!!

mysterious gal said...

wow that was brilliant.....love the lyrics to the core :)

Brosreview said...

@mysterious gal - Alas, you are here. Thanks for coming. And, thanks for appreciating.

Pradeep Bhatt said...

nice nice nice

Brosreview said...

@Pradeep - Thank you.

The Write Girl said...

Wow, this is a wonderful song...I loved it. You both did a great job. I love this line: "In August laughter Can you live without me?"
Very emotional and deep and great use of the seasons.

Brosreview said...

@The Write Girl - Thank you!!!

Walker said...

Great stuff
I like how it flows and the seasons reflect feelings

Brosreview said...

@Walker - Thank you!!!

Make Me Disappear said...

Hey Ajey,

A brilliant collaboration here. Like the last time, "No different, yet one of it's kind"

It's simple, and touching, beautifully narrated.

P.S The original title is better.

Kudos to both you you.

Brosreview said...

@Make Me Disappear - Thanks!!!

Diya said...

Can she stay without you?
This is a wonderful penning down of separation Ajey, it indeed pains. But if it really does then why do people separate?...

Brosreview said...

@Diya - Thanks a lot!!! People separate for many reasons.

Abbey said...

Gee Bros, how did we end up mates? you with your perfect love songs, me the cynic. Just wanted to stop by and say thank you for your support.. love that always.. Abz

Alexandra Garland said...

Great team work!! The song turned out beautifully!! Good byes are not easy and we always lose a piece of ourselves...
-Alex

Brosreview said...

@Abbey - Hey, no worries!!! I shall always support you.

And, thanks for reading and appreciating this song.

xx
Ajey

Brosreview said...

@Alexandra - Thank you!!! I am glad you like this one.

Cynthia said...

Hey BrosR
Chase the cold from our soul, bringing summer's easy warmth-
oh Yes! Piano and drums - love.

Brosreview said...

@Cynthia - Thanks for reading!

zorlone said...

Hey AJ,

Separation is difficult. Specially with someone you truly love.

I thought you'll end this one with them being together, I guess it happened only during the time they said goodbye.

Nicely done man!

Z

Brosreview said...

@zorlone - Well, we decided to end it like this to make it less common than it would otherwise be.

Thanks!!!

riddhi said...

"I've lived for you
You’ve lived for me
I see your eyes
They look for me
In places
In other faces

And, I know
Without me
You'll die
And, I’ll die
Without you

(Instrumental Bridge)
(Drums Fill)
(HIGH-PITCH)
I'm dying already
Can't you see?"


Like this one was visual. I could see.. What do u possess? How can u weave such a world and then give music to it as well.. Kudos,.. like u surprise me all the time..

Brosreview said...

@riddhi - Thanks, you!!! That means a lot to me.

Ms.R. said...

I, for one, listen to songs, no matter what genre, for their lyrics. And I LOVED this one. Gonna go thru all your lyrics as time permits but I really loved this one :)

Btw, what's your name? I find it wierd calling you Brosreview...

Woman in a Window said...

Love, LOVE the play of the seasons. I can see Rick in this one. It is a beautiful song and even with the hurt, one of my favorites. Great job to you both!

Brosreview said...

@Ms. R - Thank you!!!

Brosreview said...

@Woman in a window - Well, that is because he has the main share in writing this one. Thanks!!!

Tee-hee said...

Thanks for the encouraging words, Brosreview :)

This one really tugs at the heartstrings... Good job! :D

Brosreview said...

@Tee-hee - Thank you!!!

Pretty Me!! said...

God!! the pic made me sad .. but the song .. it just made me cry !! :(

Brosreview said...

@Pretty Me!! - Thank you!!! That means a lot.

thoughts said...

simply fantastic, heart tugging lyrics. loved it.

Brosreview said...

@thoughts - Thank you!!!

Saadi said...

Like I said

Ajey + Rick = Awesome Pop Duo!!

N yea, I preferred the alternative title much much more!

Just my opinion!

Brosreview said...

@Saadi - Thanks, man!

island of peace said...

i really hope that my comments are showing up. :(

it did not said any thing when i posted my comment on your latest post..