Wednesday, March 26, 2008

Below 14 upon 100


Dawns and dusks pass as I still stare at my glaring reflection
Seeing it glittering and then shimmering
Leaving me pondering of the dos and don’ts breached
As the light dims and dims and dims

Re- thinking about the past
Re- considering the situations
Re-judging the circumstances
Re-evaluating the decisions
Remission on wrongfulness
Concluding myself of been right and cursing other selves of been wrong
As the light dims and dims and dims

Immobile and solitary, I was never
But now I shall be forever
I see them sympathizing outside, I dislike it
Emphasizing on being different, I begrudge
Contacts in contact from tonne to none
How could they two leave me too?
Wanting to pull it but willing to push it
The fog has cleared now
But the light dims and dims and dims

Bitter lemons, useless ABC’s, punctures and piercings fill my routine
I turn foe to myself being restricted to Moline
Complaining of what He didn’t give (that was asked for)
Complaining of what He did give (that was uncalled for)
It was just one contact, just one
Could have, I should have probed myself
Below 14 upon100
These endless sweaty chills in May
This progressive failure of my active life
No aid as life’s fate fades as life itself
And the light dims and dims and finally dimmed to light
(Beep)

(This song is written and dedicated to a friend of Brosreview)

Copyright © Ajey Padival 2007 (Brisbane, Australia; +61-434360675; ajeypadival@msn.com)

10 responses:

Drive-thru said...

wow Ajey. This is a powerful one. Completely different style in structuring the sentences.

A'Jay said...

That was strong and emotive Bros', thank you for steering me towards it...

am I right, there seems to be an anger there (perhaps I just read that into it) and also a sorrow... I liked the emotions your words convey...

Brosreview said...

@Drive-thru- Yes, it is quite a powerful one. Yea, I went experimental on this one with the structuring.

Brosreview said...

@A'Jay - You are spot on with the observations. Thank you.

Saadi said...

I remember this one most of all!!! Possibly one of your best and as always impeccable to the last word!
Good going!

Brosreview said...

@Saadi - Thanks a lot Saadi!!!

Meena said...

Wow,
definitely depressing.

Brosreview said...

@Meena - Yes, undoubtedly depressing!!! Thanks for reading!!!

Strawberry Girl said...

I like the sense here of emptyness, solitariness. Re-thinking everything trying to come to a wholeness. Words that stick out are tonne and Moline... must look that up. Still contemplating what below 14 upon 100 could mean. The line "Bitter lemons, useless ABC's, punctures and piercings fill my routine" speaks volumes. I can recognize a similar style here to my own. Which has come to be very minimalist with the words. Oh, I am recognizing something in the last few lines... the light dimming... to light (Beep) that sounds like the last bleeps on the monitor in a hospital, the Beep is the end. (Sad)

Brosreview said...

@Strawberry Girl - I am glad you can identify such details. Thanks for reading.