Friday, February 20, 2009

The Bane

(Drum solo INTRO)

March towards the burning lake
To burn the shadow of pureness
Crush the idols of cowardliness
Under the shadow of the sword
Lies the way to lead the world
Hiss out the devastating truths
The devious demons
Lust upon the hollow trust
Kiss the skinless corpse
Free the weakling souls
To feast upon in your nightmares
Crawl under the shadows of demons
To reach the depth of Hell

(Guitar solo)

"Listening was all that mattered" (whisper)

Copyright © Ajey Padival 2009 (Brisbane, Australia; +61-434360675;

Image by Reformed Crosswords

28 responses:

judith ellis said...

These words are profoundly relevant.

Thank you.

Brosreview said...

@Judith - "These words are profoundly relevant", aren't they? Yea, I deliberately wrote it in this fashion. Something like my other song "Hunger" (you can find it in my blog). My friend called this song "an indirect expression".

Thank you.

Shadow said...

powerful truthful words! well done!

Brosreview said...

@Shadow - Thank you

Rikkij said...

a dark journey to the lake of fire. There are warnings here. Good stuff.~Rick

Brosreview said...

@Rikkij - Yea, you are spot on with that observation. Cheers mate.

Cocoyea said...

This sounds and feels like a spell being cast.

Brosreview said...

@Cocoyea - Yea, it is something like that.

George said...

subcultural underworld tones,, I like it...

Thanks for the visit to my little subterranean abode.

Feel free to drop in again anytime...

Brosreview said...

@George - Thank you!!! Yea, I have started following your blog. Hope you shall too.

Cynthia said...

Oh Yeah! March on! Strike out

Brosreview said...

@Cynthia - Yea!!! March on!!!

Linda S. Socha said...

Well done....a bit terrifying...and possibly with some words of truth in the dark otherworld? Premonitions?

Brosreview said...

@Linda - Thank you. More of a premonition than prediction.

Alexandra Garland said...

I like your poem, it's honest and that makes it so sobering... is it time for us to finally wake up?...
I like your blog very much and will visit again.

Brosreview said...

@Alexandra - Oh, thanks a lot!!! I shall visit yours as well.

thepoetryman said...

Shadows have always moved something inside of me, inside us all I assume. We are the leaders if we choose to be and... we'd better choose to lead soon or "the sword" will lose its shadow.

Nice job, Brose.

Brosreview said...

@thepoetryman - Thanks a lot!!! Yea, I agree with you.

Walker said...

Very nice
I love the visuals

There is nothing more pure than fire.
It can't be polluted like water or love and as long as you have a flame burning inside you, either can you.

Brosreview said...

@Walker - Very well put!!! Thanks.

Saadi said...

Very poetic!! And flew over me totally?! I'll comment on this again once I understand it!!

Khaled KEM said...

A dark one but I like it. I get the feeling that you jumped outside of yourself to discover what's going inside. I liked the use of nature elements of describing the conflict burning in there.

Brosreview said...

@Khaled KEM - Thanks Khaled!!! Yea, I mainly write these kind of songs. I am glad you liked it.

Brosreview said...

@Saadi - Thank you. I shall call you to help you understand.

Make Me Disappear said...

Poetic, Very unlike you.
I can very well visualize it.

I suppose it has a very metal-ish theme and writing pattern. Can go quite well with Death. Correct me if I am wrong.

And yes, sorry for commenting so late. ;)


Brosreview said...

@Make me disappear - No worries.

Umm, it is more black/doom than death.

Thank you.

Strawberry Girl said...

The Bane, the clue

A Bane can be something that destroys life, a person or thing that ruins or spoils, a deadly poison, death, destruction, ruin... Definitions via,

An over view of the lines reveals the words, pure, cowardliness, sword, world, demons, hollow trust, corpse, souls, nightmares, demons, hell.

You are marching us with the drums, towards the lake. You oddly choose to call a shadow pure... perhaps this indicates a small amount of pureness.

People often hide behind cowardliness to avoid situations, thus crushing this idol with the sword... facing the truth. Lies are devious demons. Hollow trust another reminder of the ambiguity of lies. Your mouth speaks lies... kissing the skinless corpse, liers are weaklings and you can never sleep well when the deomns of your lies are roaming around.

I may be stuck on the interpretation of lies being The bane.

I almost missed the last line... you use whispers to convey something that is rarely done. So perhaps all of the trouble could have been avoided if only they had listened.



Brosreview said...

@Strawberry Girl - You are on a roll, aren't you? You are good at deciphering my words. Good on you!!!

Yes, you are close. You've got the feel just right.

Thanks a lot!!!