Monday, June 29, 2009

Cold Inertia


(Strings + Percussion INTRO)
(Drums begin)
(Strings and Guitar dual)

We stand tall
Expecting nothing, accepting anything
Flooded with warnings
Spearing from all directions

As the Sun is blotted now
Shadows cover our lives
Frozen minds choose not
To understand the cause for this fear

Prisoners of time, we are
Looking for a change
With no feelings for others
We leave the rest to suffer

(DUAL VOCALS)
Caught up in this cold inertia
Dreams slip by with the loudest screams
Living a life relying on lies
We try for the artificial until we die

(All instruments stop except Percussion)

(SPOKEN)
A spell of love needs to be casted

(Drums begin)
(Violin Solo)
(Guitar Solo)
(Violin and Guitar dual – 3 minutes)

(ADLIB)
Save us! Help us!
Help us! Save us!

(Drums break + Percussion begin)

(SOFTLY RECITED)
Caught up in this cold inertia
Dreams slip by with the loudest screams
Living a life relying on lies
We try for the artificial until we die

(Drums begin)

Save us! Help us!
Help us! Save us!

Caught up in this cold inertia!
Dreams slip by with the loudest screams!
Living a life relying on lies!
We try for the artificial until we die!

(Strings solo – EXTRO)


Copyright © Ajey Padival 2006 (Brisbane, Australia; +61-434360675; ajeypadival@msn.com)

Image by Patrick

56 responses:

Linda S. Socha said...

Ajey
I like this post and I can fantasize the auditory....

Interesting....Detachment but with involvement in the process if not the solution....unable to act...even to move(?)toward recovery?

Is love the answer....the question?
Linda

Brosreview said...

@Linda - I like your interpretation. And, that precisely is the point or the dilemma, love; is it the answer or the question?

Thank you!!! I am glad you like this one.

The Write Girl said...

Powerful song AJ. I especially love this verse "Dreams slip by with the loudest screams..."
Beautifully written.

Woman in a Window said...

I think this one could be interpreted a number of different ways. None of them warm me. They all leave me feeling vulnerable.

Brosreview said...

@The Write Girl - Thanks!!!

Brosreview said...

@Woman in a window - Frankly, that is something I was aiming for. Thanks for reading!

Chhaya said...

i dont know why, but this sent me back to the time right after 9/11..

i really dont know the reason. may be its the chaos after that and the sense of intense detachment towards others, bcz we were so caught up with our own sense of security.

there were so many conditions o love and on trusting people we had known whole our lives..

i may be totally off the track here, but this is exactly how i felt.

needless to say, i liked it :)

lostmermaid said...

"shadows cover our lives"

some how i really liked this line .. dark but so thoughtful ... :)

Alexandra Garland said...

Hi Ajey,
Really Cool!! "Frozen minds" programmed for self absorption.
"The spell of love needs to be casted" - so true!!
Good write!!
-Alex

Brosreview said...

@Chhaya - I admire your take. And, that suits my dilemma as well. Thank you!!!

Brosreview said...

@lostmermaid - Thanks!!!

Brosreview said...

@Alexandra - Thanks!!!

Jenny said...

Ajey,

I really like this text! For me, it feels like an image and critique against a scary artificial technocratic world. Makes me think of Huxley's "Brave New World". It could also be seen as critique against totalitarianism, I think.

Really good writing!

Brosreview said...

@Jenny - Thanks, I like your take!

Rikkij said...

AJ- it would seem as though this one catches us in our chicanery. Songs that point is inward are the deepest kind. Nice job! ~rick

Brosreview said...

@Rikkij - Thanks mate!

Preetilata【ツ】 said...

Expecting nothing, accepting anything.... superb line.

the song makes me feel the never ending chaos around me where each one of us struggling for so many things say security, job, success, food...etc. but the mental piece is nowhere.

Brosreview said...

@Preetilata - Thanks a lot!

Shadow said...

raw raw emotions. i understand too well... excellent dear ajey!

Brosreview said...

@shadow - thanks a lot!!!

inky said...

so many emotions I feel with this. I felt vulnerable, frightened!! Been there ..

I do like how your heart and soul guides you in your writing.. Excellent Bros. SMILES

Brosreview said...

@inky - Thanks a lot!!! Yes, there is so much of myself in it.

Satans Darling™ said...

A spell of love needs to be casted... The writing connects to me in many ways. Beautiful work Ajey :)

thoughts said...

ajey,
its so very beautiful, and apathy described so beautifully...

Strawberry Girl said...

For me it is the indecision about what to do, with so many things that you could do. It is hard to grasp even one thing, then yes life seems to slip past you, you "scream" silently as your opportunities slip past you in your "inertia."

(Frustration well captured here Ajey) ;D

Make Me Disappear said...

Caught up in this cold inertia! Whoa!

This song hit me hard!

And I can't stop humming it! I already have a tune for it, heh!

Simple, yet profound!

Viji said...

I'm trying my hands in coming up with a new series of poems on love with a hint of dark element in it.

I would feel really happy if a song like Cold Inertia results out of my efforts, though I doubt.

"Caught up in this cold inertia
Dreams slip by with the loudest screams
Living a life relying on lies
We try for the artificial until we die"

You did it again! awesome write... I loved the above stanza, beautifully woven - it's like to two venomous snakes coiled together looks a beautiful sight but? sorry i give up...

Brosreview said...

@Satans Darling - Thanks!!!

Brosreview said...

@thoughts - Thanks, you!!!

Brosreview said...

@Strawberry Girl - Nicely put! Thank you!!!

Brosreview said...

@Make Me Disappear - Thanks.

Brosreview said...

@Viji - You'll come up with much better lines, for sure. Good luck! And, thank you!!!

J said...

I recall complaining about the weird style in this one. The flow is so very obstructed in this one.

It was only after you explained to me its purpose, I gave in.

Nice work!

Brosreview said...

@J - Thanks mate!!!

SarahA said...

Your words make me look at myself. Look within myself.

Brosreview said...

@SarahA - Thanks for reading!

PULKIT said...

excepting nothing,accepting anything!
I wonder how in many sense my life is summed up in this line...
anyways!
happy to see the non selection anti piracy code working now at ur page :D

tc god bless!
regards
PULKIT

Brosreview said...

@PULKIT - Thanks!

Pradeep Bhatt said...

i enjoyed the lyrics.
well written
thanks for commenting on my posts mate.
ciao.
god bless

Brosreview said...

@Pradeep - Thanks for visiting!

thoughts said...

this one is really good. deep.

Brosreview said...

@thoughts - Thank you!

Judith Ellis said...

The lyrics are moving, Ajey. Complicated and contradictory opening and refrain. There is a strong sense of helplessness here, of forces beyond our control affecting our lives: the sun, time, and inertia. We are "caught up." Yet, we have choices but ones that obviously can't make a difference because there remains the cry: "save up, help us."

Brosreview said...

@Judith - Thanks!

zorlone said...

There is a feeling of helplessness portrayed in the song. All you can do is to call out for help.

Whew! Another heavy creation Ajey!

Z

Brosreview said...

@zorlone - Thanks!!!

aditya said...

The way you use "inertia" is very nice. I perceive the composition as an invasion of plasticity in our lives. The lack of emotions and feelings is surely taking it's toll. Maybe a spell of love is all we need. I could identify with this one as off late I'd been thinking about how we're all becoming more and more plastic.
Keep writing !!!

Brosreview said...

@aditya - You are right with your observation. Thank you!!!

Catvibe said...

Wow. So true. I would so love to hear it.

Brosreview said...

@Catvibe - Thanks!

Gautam Anand said...

Not only have u written a powerful song but.. u also delivered a inspiring message...

In b/w.. ur comments awaited on my new post after 2 long months..

Brosreview said...

@Gautam - Thanks!!!

Leo said...

this sort of spoke to me... reminded me of me i think!! cool...

prisoners of time.. powerful words...

Brosreview said...

@Leo - Thanks mate! Yes, this is intense and personal too!

Saadi said...

I liked the opening two lines alot...and I mean alot!! :D

I know though I am in no way on the spot with this one...but this song somehow reminds me of the 'Judgment Day'!

Brosreview said...

@Saadi - Thanks!