Wednesday, June 17, 2009

Until the end II (SLOW)

This short song is dedicated to the Shieh family. My thoughts are with you during this painful time. Richie, mate, be strong!

Read the first part here: Until the end


(Strings INTRO)
(Flute solo)
(SFX – Wind)
(Piano begins)
(NO DRUMS THROUGHOUT)

Remember all those days
You promised you would stay
Be there to pick me up when I’m down

Now, that you are gone
I am left to stay alone
Until my end

Who will swallow the poison
And feed me with the nectar
Pa!

(Extended vocal echo + Instrumental break – 4 seconds)

(Piano + Vocal simultaneous start)

Nothing will be the same
Nothing will be all right
Without you by my side
I don’t know if I’ll survive
My life

(Piano ends)
(SFX – Wind EXTRO)


Copyright © Ajey Padival 2009 (Brisbane, Australia; +61-434360675; ajeypadival@msn.com)

Image by hunt4photo

35 responses:

Rikkij said...

AJ- nice write. sorry there's sadness. At the end, my mind read it as 'survive my night' instead of 'survive my life' really one in the same. ~rick

Satans Darling™ said...

Well,the song is very touching, and sad.. I know someone who relates to this. I don't know how should I react when such beautiful work comes up, but the reason why it comes up is nothing but sadness, tears and hurt. Please forgive me...

Jenny said...

Dear Ajey,

A wonderful gesture to post this lyrics. The text is poignant and beautiful and the sadness it echoes seems to spread by itself.

I compared the two versions and I think that this one contains the essence of the theme.

I also like the instrumental arrangements and wish I could here this played. However, your lyrics are so strong in themselves and it is interesting to imagine the music. For me, poetry and music are so closely linked.

/Jenny

Pretty Me!! said...

heartfelt and very touching !! one of the best lyrics written by you.

BlossomBlue said...

Touchii,sad,emotional..
I like ur poetry a lot.. Kinda addicted to it now..

inky said...

Love this one Bros, your poetry is music to my ears. I hope all is well with the Shieh family. God be with them.. This is such a heartfelt dedication

aditya said...

There is sadness in there .. but sorrow can be beautiful at times.
I like the way you ended !

mysterious gal said...

aww..i just dont have words to express ..the lyrics literally choked me...this was just too heartfelt, touching and beautiful! And the sadness and hurt comes out and grasps the reader...only u could do such a thing!

Shadow said...

deep deep sadnes....

Alexandra Garland said...

Ajey, thoughtful and so touching. Beautiful way to remember someone. Very well written.
-Alex

Gerry Boyd said...

Beautiful lyrics simply stated. I can feel the sorrow.

SarahA said...

I have to agree with the above, there IS beauty in sadness; I am thinking. I am liking your words, muchly. Very heartfelt, you.

Strawberry Girl said...

I hope the Shieh family will feel a measure of comfort from the thoughts of their friends. I will pray that their hearts will heal.

I like how you address the feeling of astonished loss, a feeling that can be hard to capture. Plus the sense that the person lost was a buffer to the hardships of life. Which would make facing the world all the more difficul. We all tend to feel more acutely what we once had, when it is then lost. (and it takes time to feel normal again)

I love how your words and music flow together. The instumental directions go beautifully with the piece. The thought of the flute and wind, both such fleeting and sometimes soulful sounds would touch on the senses brought out in the words.

What a beautiful piece...

SG

Robin said...

AJ - very moving and well written.
Sorry for the sadness...

Leo said...

hey ajey, this is most touching lyrics bro! tune it fast n make the song will u? :)

can't wait to hear it! :)

Viji said...

a sad moment laced with such profound love...lovely Ajey.. maybe lovely is a wrong word, but still I feel it's so beautiful and lovely..you know how I feel? I feel like picking the child, hug him and tell him I am there for him. Though I am not his dad, I would promise to love him as my own child.

I don't know who Richie is but he is lucky to have a friend like you at his difficult times...

Jadis said...

Who will swallow the poison
And feed me with the nectar
Pa!
So very hitting!.. I was taken aback at the way two lines could end up speaking volumes...

Judith Ellis said...

Immediate and heartfelt, Ajey. You are a gift, my friend.

Bonnie Bonsai said...

Touching and sorrowful.... I also like the accompaniment. Makes the expression of emotion more intensed.

Great piece of work BR.

Dark Faery said...

Very touching indeed ...

Kartz said...

Poignant, per se, would be an understatement.

That ran so deep...

Peace. Be well.

---
Yes, I guess I am back to active blogging. Things are rather hectic. Will update soon.

Trust things are fine at your end too.

Peace.

Rebekah Cadman said...

So moving. It is touching. I love how you have intertwined deep sadness and love. Beautiful.

Rainbow dreams said...

A lovely but so raw and heartfelt dedication, so sad...
and something in there that touches somewhere deep - tears in my eyes reading it.
You are so talented!! You always write from your heart and it shows, thank you, Katie

droL said...

It isn't easy to embrace our loss of someone so dear. And it is painful to see them go, wishing you could stop nature, but know you can't. I feel the pain in this lyrics, and it makes me remember my late thoughtful sister and my doting grandma...

I can't write anymore.

Lilly Jones said...

Wow,
I've been away from the blog scene for a while and this first piece I read is great. I feel a deep pain when I read it, as well as grief or mourning for something that won't ever be...

Were you writing about a personal experience because it felt so deep? Hmmm, that's life I guess and while the lyrics resonated in my heart in a sad way, the music was actually soothing. Thanks for sharing & stay blessed.

LJ

The Write Girl said...

Hi AJ,

This is a beautiful piece...best wishes to the Shieh family.

Woman in a Window said...

I was just scrolling down and thinking about my own comment when i saw SarahA's. Yes, exactly. Such beauty comes from sadness. Let's let it come from happy too, one day.

AJey, hope your heart is well and your loved ones close. Take care.
erin

Arjun said...

Here it is. Hmmm, I'm really sorry, man. Hope the best for the Shieh family. Beautiful piece, though I'm sure you didn't write it to showcase your writing prowess. It was a window into your head.


May the Shieh family be strong.

Preetilata【ツ】 said...

heartfelt and touching it was.

my prayers and wishes for shieh family.

thepoetryman said...

to paraphrase Kahlil Gibran, "The selfsame well that holds our joy also holds our sorrow. The deeper we swim in sorrow the greater our joy can become...(and visa versa.)

Peace, my friend.

Walker said...

Very nice, heartfelt emotion.
We swim in a sea of emotions and sometimes a large wave sweeps down to push us below until we can punch back up gasping for air

zorlone said...

The words show pain. Something that someone who had just lost a loved one may not be able to express fully in this situation.

You showed here that it is all right to feel remorse and sadness.

I feel the sorrow.

Z

Saadi said...

I think I'm late wishing the Shieh family well. But I hope whatever crisis they were going thru has passed!

Coming to the song, you must've been pretty close to them for writing such a wonder!

Extremely haunting! Extremely beautiful!

Once again, there is no one as good as you in this place!

Brosreview said...

@Saadi - Thanks man!

Vittaldas Prabhu said...

Ajey,
This brief song is as beautiful as the original. One describes a long lost son returning back and trying hard to amend things, while the second very beautifully depicts the helplessness within for not having given back enough.