Sunday, September 12, 2010


The smoke fills the room
Your eyes
They pain
They twinkle
For the wrong reasons

The smoke fogs the vision

The smoke clogs your decision

It is time to tap it

Breathe in to breathe out

Breathe out to breathe in

Could not take the leap of faith

But, I took a drag

To the end

This heart is now an ashtray 

Effect by Ajey Padival

Copyright © Ajey Padival 2010 (Brisbane, Australia; +61434360675;

14 responses:

Wendilea said...

Sad but honest is its simple beauty. Nice one Ajey!

SandyCarlson said...

So it goes, and it as sad as it is painful.

TechnoBabe said...

Yuck. There too many adjectives about smoke. All bad ones.

The Write Girl said...

Wow, I absolutely love the metaphors especially the last lines. Amazing writing here AJ.

Lauren Elizabeth said...

amazing post, simple amazing. the words you used and the way you used them really catch someones attention. your a great writer!!


Walker said...

Another good one.
If you dont take a drag, life would be boring.

Shadow said...

what an excellent analogy!

Opaque said...

@Wendilea - Yes! Thanks!

Opaque said...

@Sandy - Yes, it is.

Opaque said...

@TechnoBabe - Thanks for reading.

Opaque said...

@The Write Girl - Thanks!

Opaque said...

@Lauren - Thanks!

Opaque said...

@Walker - Thanks! True!

Opaque said...

@Shadow - Thanks!