The smoke fills the room
Your eyes
They pain
They twinkle
For the wrong reasons
The smoke fogs the vision
The smoke clogs your decision
It is time to tap it
Breathe in to breathe out
Breathe out to breathe in
Could not take the leap of faith
But, I took a drag
To the end
This heart is now an ashtray
Effect by Ajey Padival
Copyright © Ajey Padival 2010 (Brisbane, Australia; +61434360675; ajeypadival@msn.com
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12 responses:
So it goes, and it as sad as it is painful.
Yuck. There too many adjectives about smoke. All bad ones.
Wow, I absolutely love the metaphors especially the last lines. Amazing writing here AJ.
amazing post, simple amazing. the words you used and the way you used them really catch someones attention. your a great writer!!
xoxo
Another good one.
If you dont take a drag, life would be boring.
what an excellent analogy!
@Wendilea - Yes! Thanks!
@Sandy - Yes, it is.
@TechnoBabe - Thanks for reading.
@Lauren - Thanks!
@Walker - Thanks! True!
@Shadow - Thanks!
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