Friday, April 24, 2009

Dance of Life


(Instrumental INTRO)

Noisy silence
I hear you
Sweet Incision
I feel you
Give me all that you have
Cause more is good for me

(Keyboard Bridge)

Straight lines are wavy now
Going on a “businessman’s trip” now
Confidence that fuels my arrogance
I’m embracing my fate now

(Guitar Bridge)

It’s what I say
That strangles my neck
With the chord in my hand
Pulling it more
Away from myself

(Instrumental Bridge)

I take the path
You tell me to take
I fake the truth
To make you to take

Me inside this maze
Tell me again
What did you say?
What did you say to me?

Don’t push me around!
Cause the world has done!
Now, you show me!
How to live in fear!
I’ve forgotten!
And, I will forget!
What I just told you!
But, I’ll remember you!

Probe into the wounds of my soul!
Dig deep through these wounds of my soul!

It’s what I say
That strangles my neck
With the chord in my hand
Pulling it more
Away from myself

(Instrumental Bridge)
(Guitar solo)
(Guitar + Keyboard duo)
(Bass Bridge)
(Strings solo)

Try to save my life!
By killing me!
From the inside now!
Nothing works for me!
Except the hurt!
In this never ending trip!
This Dance of Life has held me strong!
It refuses to give up!

Probe into the wounds of my soul!
Dig deep through these wounds of my soul!

(Guitar Bridge)

It’s what I say
That strangles my neck
With the chord in my hand
Pulling it more
Away from myself

It’s what I say
That strangles my neck
With the chord in my hand
Pulling it more
Away from myself

(Instrumental EXTRO)

(Alternate title - Away from Myself)

Copyright © Ajey Padival 2009 (Brisbane, Australia; +61-434360675; ajeypadival@msn.com)

Image by LOCOincubus

70 responses:

Diya said...

Wow, me first...!!
Treat for this :P
Thanks for following my blog :)
This is again another of your powers..!!
Hey what do you have while penning them down re? Jus wanna know...!:P
"Confidence fueling my arrogance", I simply adored this truth! And 'wounds within my soul', wow... wont spoil the resonance of the feelings with words...!!
Simply wonderful as ever! :)
Please mail me the song as you sing it if you can, I so wanna hear it..! :)

Diya said...

Secong comment too goes to my credit, another treat for that :P
Forgot to say, remembered this during my 5th reading of the song... The first stanza is succh a sweet contradiction..!!

Opaque said...

@Diya - Thanks, you!!! I am glad you like this one. Sure, when the song is done, I shall post a link here and e-mail it to you too.

Opaque said...

@Diya - "5th reading"; thanks again!!! I was just at your spot a few second back. Respond to me!!!

Rikkij said...

There is a profound version of an accepted truth here. Heads or tails?-in a room full of mirrors.
a looking for life in death-hope in a land of no hope. strangulation by breathing. interesting. Good penning. ~rick

Opaque said...

@Rikkij - AH, exactly!!! You so get my point. Thank you!!!

Noelle Dunn.... A Poet in Progress said...

I am amazed every time I read...your words are amazing!

Opaque said...

@Noelle - Thanks a lot!!!

Maverick said...

wow...awesome words....luvd da intense emotional feel to dis one...jst da way I like it.....dis song is sure to touch da heart of ny reader....way to go, Ajey! :)

Opaque said...

@Maverick - Thank you!!! I am glad you like this one!!!

Make Me Disappear said...

Ajey, this is absolutely fantastic.

It reminded me of a few lines from a short story I wrote sometime back.

Allow me to quote some lines here.

"There stood a horseman, nude. And here stood I,nude less. Life had seeped through the sand of the dessert. He laughed at my pity, and disappeared. Who was he, and Who am I? Still searching for the answer."

Thank You..

Opaque said...

@Make Me Disappear - Thank you!!!

Anonymous said...

You kinda scare me! I think you maybe morphing into me. (That is not such a good thing. Be warned!)Ha! 'thanks, you' *dance* My craziness is growing!
I am actually liking this one, even though there is that 'dark' aspect, there is light shinning through.
Well done,you!

Opaque said...

@SarahA - Thank you!!! I am glad that you like this one!!!

Unknown said...

AH, I so get it AJ!Perhaps, because I have been through this.

"Straight lines are wavy now
Going on a “businessman’s trip” now
Confidence that fuels my arrogance
I’m embracing my fate now"

This refreshes my understanding of this quite complex piece. You've managed to connect it quite well in the end. I like the checkpoints in your song.

A very good song!

Opaque said...

@J - Look who's here? You finally made it, didn't you? Thanks mate!!! Yea, I understand the complex metaphors making it hard to understand. But, then you know me too. Heh. Keep commenting!!! Well, I like the detailed feedback discussions over weekends too. Ha!!! Thank you again!!!

The Write Girl said...

Wow, this is some song. I laughed at this line a bit "Give me all that you have, Cause more is good for me" but then it got really deep. It definitely grips you at the core.

Opaque said...

@The Write Girl - I see what you mean. Thank you!!!

Viji said...

oft repeated lines carry the stress and magic of this particular piece.

"strangles my neck
With the chord in my hand
Pulling it more
Away from myself "

I could see the word "now" used thrice in the second stanza..I think it will come neat while playing an instrument - an interim flourish :)

liked it very much Ajey. Unique!

Woman in a Window said...

Brosreview, it's a hard one. Difficult 'cause I think we all have been here, wanting one thing, begging for the other, acting in one way but getting the opposite result.

And then this:
"It’s what I say
That strangles my neck
With the chord in my hand"
Shit. That happens too often.

Good one, albeit not one bunny or unicorn again!

Opaque said...

@Viji - Thank you!!! Yea, the repetition is only to stress the current situation.

Opaque said...

@Woman in a Window - I am not sure of the "we all have been there" but it could be, perhaps. Thank you!!!

Viji said...

it's beautiful Ajey.. gave it another read :)

I take the path
You tell me to take
I fake the truth
To make you to take

ain't it true??? stunning.

Opaque said...

@Viji - It is so very true!!! Thank you again!!!

PhilO♥ said...

Hey!!
Thanks for commenting first :)
You rock!
Do you like umm..play all of these on any instrument ?? You're great in writing.

Opaque said...

@Cursed - Thanks, you!!!

Shadow said...

'it's what i say that strangles my neck' brilliant!

Opaque said...

@Shadow - Thank you!!!

Anonymous said...

I don't need the music, very poem like. I'm listening to Dean Martin, strangely they make a good mix. ~Mary

Opaque said...

@FrankandMary - Thank you!!!

Anonymous said...

Mirror , Mirror on the wall, dance with me I shall not Fall. Shall I hide, disappear! Dance to the light!! Such expression in this one. I hope I can hear all your songs one DAY. UR AMAZING.. :}}

zorlone said...

I was a bit confused what the picture was until I looked at it closer, rather, when I took the whole picture as a whole. Pretty intense stuff again!

The song shows a lot of image like what an MTV would probably be like. Sorry, I'm not a pro at this stuff, but you know how much I use imagery in my work, so I believe this one paints the scenes very well!

Another great work mate!

Z

Opaque said...

@inky - Yea, hopefully!!! Thank you!!!

Opaque said...

@zorlone - Nice approach!!! Thank you!!!

IJ said...

Brosreview,
This is powerful ... this is real deep & the lyrics speak. I believe that there are many people who have been there in one way or another ... as "Woman In A Window" put it. Then there are many others who can identify with certain parts, finding something personal in the words. Too powerful. Well done!

-LJ

Opaque said...

@Lilly Jones - Thanks a lot!!!

Josephine said...

Hi Ajey,
Quite extreme this one... that's your forte though... interesting!!
-Alex

Opaque said...

@Alexandra Garland - Thank you!!!

PhilO♥ said...

I've awarded you. Go to my blog!

Opaque said...

@Cursed - Thank you!!!

Anonymous said...

You seem to be on a roll with your writing Bros... good work.

tis hard to get a message in over here.lol

Tell me my friend do you write anything on social justice? Palestine or Sri Lanka?.. I could feature that

hope your well... Abbey

Opaque said...

@Abbey - Welcome back!!! Thank you!!! Yea, I shall get back to you on that one.

Walker said...

Very nice

Shake the bonds and choose your own way

Opaque said...

@Walker - Thanks!!!

Linda S. Socha said...

Resurrection? Dying into one's self to gain self? Contradiction at every turn making it a bit like life?
Linda

Opaque said...

@Linda - Exactly!!! A bit of everything there Linda. Thanks for reading!!!

Anonymous said...

Speaking of Dance , we are back on stage once more, enjoy your weekend!! :}

Opaque said...

@inky - Thank you!!!

SandyCarlson said...

Such a probing can be very painful!

Opaque said...

@sandycarlson - Yes, this is!!! Thank you!!!

joaquin carvel said...

that chorus is brutal - love it.

Opaque said...

@joaquin carvel - Thanks mate!!!

The Write Girl said...

Hey Brosreview,

I have an award for you. So please check it out when you have time.

Thanks.

PhilO♥ said...

Hi!!
Glad you lied my post :)

Opaque said...

@The Write Girl - Yes, thank you!!! I am heading your way!!!

Opaque said...

@Cursed - No worries!!!

Cynthia said...

Whew! awesome. I'm thinking of someone who tries to toughen me
up by hurting me, tries to reach
inside to own me or cease the
heart within. Thank you for writing
this down Bros.

Opaque said...

@Cynthia - Coming from you means a lot to me!!! Thank you!!!

LORENZO said...

First stanza is awesome! Wish there was a way to listen to your songs. The lyrics are poems unto themselves...all the best. LL

Opaque said...

@LORENZO - Coming from you means a lot to me. Thanks mate!!!

Kartz said...

Deep. Subterranean. Painfully beautiful...

Pity I cannot quite imagine all the tunes (the keyboard aside, that is).

Keep writing/composing. Spread the voice.

Peace. Have a nice day.

Opaque said...

@Kartz - Thanks. I appreciate you tracking back.

Jenny said...

Wow! Expressive, powerful and I love these enigmatic lines (for instance): "Give me all that you have/Cause more is good for me".

You play with contradictions and words in a very skillful way. Like the name of your blog. Great!

I will follow this blog now!

Cheers,
Jenny

Opaque said...

@Jenny - Thanks, you!!!

Cynthia said...

Give me all that you have, cause
more is good for me - oh yeah!
My favorite song so far - kind of
defines my thinking, at times.
The desire confused.

Opaque said...

@Cynthia - Thanks, you!!!

Zendagi Migzara said...

"Noisy silence
I hear you
Sweet Incision
I feel you
Give me all that you have
Cause more is good for me"

"It’s what I say
That strangles my neck
With the chord in my hand
Pulling it more
Away from myself"

Hmmmm..... Just loved these lines, buddy!!

Opaque said...

@Zendagi - Thank you.

thoughts said...

simply fabulous. your works never fail to leave a deep impact.

they are true treasure.
warmest wishes,

Opaque said...

@thoughts - Thank you!!!