This song is written/co-edited with my good friend Rick John (One Big Love)
Read our first successful effort here - I stay awake
(Guitar Strokes + Bass w/o Drums)
You tell me to go
Your eyes
They say
Far, far away
And, you tell me as
You hide your tears
“Take care and
Be well”
But, I wonder
(Piano begins w/o Drums)
Why should I
Take care of myself
For whom should I
Take care of myself
And, why should you
Bear the shame and
Hide the pain
That leaving knows
(Drums Begin - OVERLAPPING VOCALS)
I worry Love
(DUAL VOCALS)
In August laughter
Can you live without me?
Now and hereafter (OVERLAPPING Drum Fill)
If I go
Away from you now
Will your heart let go
And, can it be free?
Yea
Can it ever be free?
(Guitar Bridge)
(Drums Fill)
I've lived for you
You’ve lived for me
I see your eyes
They look for me
In places
In other faces
And, I know
Without me
You'll die
And, I’ll die
Without you
(Instrumental Bridge)
(Drums Fill)
(HIGH-PITCH)
I'm dying already
Can't you see?
Can't we bear Winter?
That April might find us and
Chase the cold from our soul
Bringing summer’s easy warmth
To wash away goodbye
(HIGH-PITCH)
I'm dying already
Can't you see?
(Drums Fill)
(DUAL VOCALS)
In August laughter
Can you live without me?
Now and hereafter (OVERLAPPING Drum Fill)
If I go
Away from you now
Will your heart let go
Will it be free?
Yea
Will it ever be free?
Without me
you'll die and
So will I
I'm dying already!
Can't you see?
Come save me, my love
You’re my angel, my love
(DUAL VOCALS)
In August laughter
Can you live without me?
Now and hereafter (OVERLAPPING Drum Fill)
If I go
Away from you now
Will your heart let go
Will it be free?
Tell me love
Can it ever be free?
(REPEAT – FADE OUT)
(Alternate title - You tell me)
Copyright © Rick John, ed. Ajey Padival and Rick John 2009 (Australia/United Kingdom; ajeypadival@msn.com and rikkij77@yahoo.co.uk)
Image by Dr4kon
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59 responses:
Hey beautiful lines. touching. it's as if i am reading my words. Good work Rick,AJ...
could it get any better??? i don't think so. perfect!
The lyrics has a personal touch to me as of late. Very touching and emotional.
With words like these, why do you have to use drums? Notes are Rock? I personally would prefer just piano accompaniment. More for sentimental reason.
(I had been into medical field too, but did not get a chance to practice it here. But it sounds you are happy outside dentistry.) :)
@Viji - Thank you!
@Shadow - Ah, thanks!!!
@Bonnie - Ah, yes I thought of the same instrumentation too. But, since I was desperate to add a soft rock element to it, like the last one, I added drums.
Yea, I am glad with what I am doing right now.
Thanks you!!!
Simply amazing!! Wonderfully deep and touching.....you guys write awesome stuff together.
@Noelle - Thank you!!! I am glad you like this one.
AJ-I really like how you arranged the lyrics and music. really like the pic too. Thanks for letting me tinker with your song. ~rick
@Rikkij - Ah! you are here! Thanks mate. I am glad you like the add-ins. Couldn't create the magic without you. Thanks again!!!
Awesome....simply amazing...nothing could be any better...
Loved the way you used season.....And the title is apt.
@dreamer - Thank you!!!
I must write that it is quite rarely I get to read something soft from you. Well, this particular one is a collaboration going uphill.
A decently good one. The last one was good as well. The similar mood-set exists in this song too.
Good luck!
@J - Thanks mate. Yea, something soft to neutralize the otherwise intense and dark effect.
Hey,
That was very touching... It struck a chord in me, coz I relate to it... So beautifully worded..
Superbo!!
hi ajey,
thanks for this beautiful lyrics. it reminded me of something which has gone into hibernation inside my heart. beautiful, touching, painful.. it is full of every emotions. n i loved it so very much.
ps: since long no visits from u.
take care. :)
Very poignant and beautiful!
The "drum add" is a contrast that complements the delicateness of the words and the piano.
I am a big fan of these sorts of contrasts. :)
/Jenny
This is bloody brilliant, you!
And, why should you
Bear the shame and
Hide the pain
That leaving knowsBest line for sure...
@Zendagi - Thanks!!!
@Preetilata - Thank you. I am glad you like this one.
Well, I did not receive any updates from your spot. Well, I am heading there right away.
@Jenny - I am glad you identified the reason behind those elements. Thanks!!!
@SarahA - Ah, thank you!!!
@thepoetryman - Thanks!!!
wow that was brilliant.....love the lyrics to the core :)
@mysterious gal - Alas, you are here. Thanks for coming. And, thanks for appreciating.
nice nice nice
@Pradeep - Thank you.
Wow, this is a wonderful song...I loved it. You both did a great job. I love this line: "In August laughter Can you live without me?"
Very emotional and deep and great use of the seasons.
@The Write Girl - Thank you!!!
Great stuff
I like how it flows and the seasons reflect feelings
@Walker - Thank you!!!
Hey Ajey,
A brilliant collaboration here. Like the last time, "No different, yet one of it's kind"
It's simple, and touching, beautifully narrated.
P.S The original title is better.
Kudos to both you you.
@Make Me Disappear - Thanks!!!
Can she stay without you?
This is a wonderful penning down of separation Ajey, it indeed pains. But if it really does then why do people separate?...
@Diya - Thanks a lot!!! People separate for many reasons.
Gee Bros, how did we end up mates? you with your perfect love songs, me the cynic. Just wanted to stop by and say thank you for your support.. love that always.. Abz
Great team work!! The song turned out beautifully!! Good byes are not easy and we always lose a piece of ourselves...
-Alex
@Abbey - Hey, no worries!!! I shall always support you.
And, thanks for reading and appreciating this song.
xx
Ajey
@Alexandra - Thank you!!! I am glad you like this one.
Hey BrosR
Chase the cold from our soul, bringing summer's easy warmth-
oh Yes! Piano and drums - love.
@Cynthia - Thanks for reading!
Hey AJ,
Separation is difficult. Specially with someone you truly love.
I thought you'll end this one with them being together, I guess it happened only during the time they said goodbye.
Nicely done man!
Z
@zorlone - Well, we decided to end it like this to make it less common than it would otherwise be.
Thanks!!!
"I've lived for you
You’ve lived for me
I see your eyes
They look for me
In places
In other faces
And, I know
Without me
You'll die
And, I’ll die
Without you
(Instrumental Bridge)
(Drums Fill)
(HIGH-PITCH)
I'm dying already
Can't you see?"
Like this one was visual. I could see.. What do u possess? How can u weave such a world and then give music to it as well.. Kudos,.. like u surprise me all the time..
@riddhi - Thanks, you!!! That means a lot to me.
I, for one, listen to songs, no matter what genre, for their lyrics. And I LOVED this one. Gonna go thru all your lyrics as time permits but I really loved this one :)
Btw, what's your name? I find it wierd calling you Brosreview...
Love, LOVE the play of the seasons. I can see Rick in this one. It is a beautiful song and even with the hurt, one of my favorites. Great job to you both!
@Ms. R - Thank you!!!
@Woman in a window - Well, that is because he has the main share in writing this one. Thanks!!!
Thanks for the encouraging words, Brosreview :)
This one really tugs at the heartstrings... Good job! :D
@Tee-hee - Thank you!!!
God!! the pic made me sad .. but the song .. it just made me cry !! :(
@Pretty Me!! - Thank you!!! That means a lot.
simply fantastic, heart tugging lyrics. loved it.
@thoughts - Thank you!!!
Like I said
Ajey + Rick = Awesome Pop Duo!!
N yea, I preferred the alternative title much much more!
Just my opinion!
@Saadi - Thanks, man!
i really hope that my comments are showing up. :(
it did not said any thing when i posted my comment on your latest post..
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