Monday, June 8, 2009
Under the drowning sun
(Keyboard Solo)
Standing alone
On the outside
Looking into the
Home that was burning
My childish dreams were shattering
I lost his pride
And, I stood with no understanding
Happiness and fate collide
And, I stood there wondering
That this world is a two-faced animal
Whom do I trust now?
I see my branches twist and play
(Drum Fill)
(Strings begin)
Under the black moon and flaming guns
Under the helpless drowning sun
Arising danger, but I fear none
The ring shall come no near
It’s me, it fears
Drink all the poison and breath in
My emptiness fills within
And, my heart shatters from sin
(Strings end)
(Drum Fill)
(Guitar Solo)
(Instrumentals - 1 minute)
Standing alone
On the outside
Walking into the
Home that is burning
My childish dreams are shattering
No! I cannot lose his pride
And, I’ll stand up to give up what I have
Happiness shall prevail
And, I shall stand defending
That this world is a two-faced animal
I shall trust no one but me
I’ll cut my branches that twist and play
(Drum Fill)
(Guitar Solo)
(Drum Fill)
(Strings begin)
Under the black moon
Under the flaming guns
Under the drowning sun
Arising fear, but I have none
The ring shall come no near
It’s me! It fears
Empty the poison
And, breathe in
My emptiness
Fills within
And, my heart
Shatters from sin
Copyright © Ajey Padival 2008 (Brisbane, Australia; +61-434360675; ajeypadival@msn.com)
Image by Totalzombie
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Ajay - This is definitely a favourite for me - I like the story you're telling, the images are vivid. I just wish I could hear it!
(The photo is great too.)
Kat
@Poetikat - Thanks!!! I'm glad you figured it out.
AJ-I think this is of your best work. A real weaving of thoughts in perfect sync. I wouldn't change a thing! ~rick
@Rikkij - Ah, thanks mate!!! It means a lot to me.
This one's more intense and a bit toned down compared to ur oder works. Nevertheless, the feel is excellently conveyed. Loved dis one! :)
@Maverick - Thanks!!! Yes, I toned it down in this one.
I'm liking this one as well. Very interesting. Your very good with putting these songs of yours together..they are my favorite kind- songs with lyrics that have meaning behind them.
What a powerful and emotional piece. I love your title and these words conveyed such lovely imagery
"Under the black moon and flaming guns...Under the helpless drowning sun"
Nicely done!!
@findingmywingsinlife - Thanks, you! I am glad you like it.
@The Write Girl - Thank you!!!
AJ lovely :)
Imagine "I lost his pride" ... i would call this the second best.. the first one is "Destiny"
The last stanza is awsome..
@Viji - Thank you!!! So, you've read "Destiny", eh? I'm glad to know you liked it.
I have read all your songs and commented everyone of them I guess :) but "Destiny" is something.. I doubt if you can equal that ever, even if you do I will still be partial to it..
@Viji - Thanks Viji! You've made my day! Really, you have! Thanks for that!
Ajay,
These lines are incredible:
"Under the black moon and flaming guns
Under the helpless drowning sun
Arising danger, but I fear none"
The heavy flaming imagery, wow! "Under the drowning sun" is such a great title as well.
/Jenny
@Jenny - Thank you so much!
Under the black moon and flaming guns
Under the helpless drowning sun
These line are my fav. Creativity :D Loved it
@Ms.R - Thank you!!!
Everything here is flawless, I am awestruck! This is perhaps one of the best I have read, wonderful.
@Diya - Thank you!!!
i shall trust no-one but me... i like that, and although it's far from the ideal, sometimes it's essential!
@Shadow - Thank you!!! And, yes, I agree with you.
That this world is a two-faced animal
I shall trust no one but me
I’ll cut my branches that twist and play
Such strong words with deep meanings. you know, it hit home.. I love love love this ONE. Gosh I have so many faves of yours now.
I will remember these words I'' cut my branches that twist and play..
Again you made me DANCE!!!
Drink all the poison and breath in
My emptiness fills within
And, my heart shatters from sin
very strong lines !! brilliant lyrics :)
Sometimes it feels like the world is coming down on us… Those are the moments we need to look within and trust ourselves the most. Great write Ajay!!
-Alex
It's funny AJ sometimes I can 'hear' you. Really 'hear' your words drumming a beat in my thoughts and at other times; nowt.
With this here words, I can 'hear' and because of such I am liking more.But doesn't that say something? When someone who physically can not hear, hears such within.
Ok enough waffling....I really just wanted to say....good one, you!
@inky - Ah, thank you so much!
@Pretty Me!! - Thanks!!!
@Alexandra - Well put Alex! Thank you!!!
@SarahA - That is huge SarahA! Thank you!!!
Well here I finally am. You've been such a dedicated responder to my poetry and I've been a total ass about getting here and commenting. Not that I haven't been by, I have many times, but for some reason I haven't been by when you've posted poems (songs) and finally I have made it when you did. I should be flogged, consider me completely flogged. I've been a bad girl, I hope you'll forgive me. I have to say, I love your choice of music on your blog, being a classical artist myself and loving the way what you have chosen washes over me. I love these lyrics and so wish I could just hear the music that accompanies it. This world is a two faced animal... You have some incredible images going on here and I love it.
@Catvibe - Thanks for visiting my spot. Nah! I understand. I reckon you must have been too busy to be here. Here, I release song(s) every week.
Thanks for reading and appreciating!
Hi Ajey :-)
Am very thankful for your visit in my blog- because of it, I also had the privilege of knowing about your wonderful works! Your art is exceptional.
These lyrics are great- in substance, most especially. It would be great to hear the song! :-)
More power,
Leofina Jane
@Leoffina - Thank you so much!
Hmmm.... A connect of the inside and outside world.. more like a fight within oneself... The imagery here is lovely yet painful...
Keep them coming...
@Zendagi - Thank you!!!
Standing Ovation!
Great work.. I am speechless.. This is just perfectly conveyed :)
@Satans Darling - Thank you!!!
its absolutely fantastic. loved the optimist shining out bright.
Oh bravo!! I love it Bros. :D
Music and pen... inspiring together. I am working on a story inspired by Kenny Loggins song "I'm Free" "Heaven helps the man who fights his fear, loves the only thing that keeps me here. "I'm Free!" You're the reason that I'm hangin on. My hearts staying where my heart belongs. "I'm Free!"
There are guitar rifes, drums and an electronically generated sound throughout.
Haven't worked on my story for a while though...
(Plus, though I am inspired by music, it would be hard for me to add musical details like you do... though I haven't tried. Hmmmm.)
Question, how much of your work is recorded with the music?
Hmmm. alrighty looking around your blog, I gather that these songs have been recorded, fantastic!! I too would like to hear them. ;p :D
@thoughts - Thank you!!!
@Strawberry Girl - Thank you so much! Well, only a few are been recorded now.
@Strawberry Girl - Not all of them are recorded. A few are in the process. Once done, I shall share a link here.
Heavy metal with a touch of poetry Ajey!
Lemme see, a man on top of the mountains with fast forward scenes of day and night. The sun soars and sets, then the moon rises and fades away. Close up of the man with inner turmoil seen in his face.
My take on the MTV of this song.
Z
@zolrone - Ah! That is a nice idea Z! Thanks for that! And, yes, thanks for reading my song too.
now i am in lost of words. wish i cud hear it. :)
p.s... net problem so not regular thz days plus busy with colg works. sorry.
@Preetilata - Thanks, you. Nah, I understand people being busy with their daily rituals. I too am busy with many things in hand. Good luck!
I totally agree with 'Poetikat'. I would love to hear it. I think it really takes you on a journey and is so beautifully written. Keep it up - I love reading your stuff.
This is different. It's depressing, but not twisted like that other album you have.
Is this a new album you started recently?
@Rebekah - Thanks, you! Yes, I'll most certainly put up a link once the song is recorded.
@Meena - Ah! Thanks for coming. Umm, yes, I am working on multiple albums now. I haven't finished the "twisted" album THE yet. There are two more songs to come for the same album. Well, you can check the label below each song that indicates the album title. If you click on it, all the songs that fall under the album will be displayed.
Such a powerful and emotional piece. Deeply moving. And I love the title!
@Robin - Thanks mate!
Hi Ajey,
Another epic song. I could not say more than everyone commented here bros. I know that one day you will produce your own album. Keep writing and writing.
@Khaled - Inshallah!!! Thanks a lot!
Mate, you demand superior musicianship here for this song. Highly demanding frontal and central section. The end seems more forgiving as the structure is clean.
Good words and felt the depth of it. The contrast is amazing. The branches analogy is well done.
Good job! Good luck!
@J - Thanks, man! I thought so too about the musical elements. I tried trimming it down but I think this is how it has got to go.
This is great especially this part
"Under the black moon
Under the flaming guns
Under the drowning sun
Arising fear, but I have none
The ring shall come no near
It’s me! It fears"
I can relate to some of this
@Walker - Thanks mate!!!
I feel darkly vibrant with an pinch of melancholy. Quite fine buddy! Thanks for dropping by by the way =)
@Quackster - Thanks, man!
Wow. BrosR. you blew me away with
this song. Beautifully heartbreaking, brings to mind a
young child in a war-torn country.
BR. I having a challenge at
Epiphany, please join in!
@Cynthia - Thank you!!!
ok i read this one in office and thought i already left my words..
to see your childhood dreams fall in front of you is heartening..
I loved the expression "Happiness and fate collide"
It is like being at that juncture in life when things just happen by themselves. You cant help it. Being at the nucleus of the turmoil, at the same time being a silent spectator to it is frustrating.. living at the margins..
It can be tough..is tough.. ok As I always say, i am poetically illiterate. It is what i make of it.. even if this is not at all what u wanted to convey... I will like it anyway :)
@riddhi - It is a fair interpretation Riddhi. Thanks! I am glad you liked it.
Definitely a favorite of mine from now on!
Absolutely love it!
Art-work compliments the theme brilliantly.
Sorry again, for coming so late!
Hope you'll understand brother! Life's certainly not easy these days :)
@Make Me Disappear - Ah! Thanks mate!!!
Is it on the loss of innocence in childhood?!
Or something related to children....the questions they possess about the world or something along those lines?!
That's my guess!! Nehow, it's somewhat different from ur other stuff...but it is good, no doubt!
@Saadi - Thanks, man!
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